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Jamie's Grim Tabulations's avatar

>Like she’d been screaming into the Void for hours.

Feels weird to call this line out but I'm a vomplete sucker for a good '"cameo/callback"

The colloquialisms here are so damn good. Dialogue is hard enough, but mixing in a variety of different slang from different groups is mint.

Also Ben be walking into that bathroom like: https://media1.giphy.com/media/v1.Y2lkPTZjMDliOTUyeHNjZHRqZWIxdDcxenRkOW5mbzJkaWRvem1kM202bm00Y2k1dWg1ZSZlcD12MV9pbnRlcm5hbF9naWZfYnlfaWQmY3Q9Zw/3ohs4tKADK8HEYD4I0/giphy.gif

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Thank you so much for this!! That’s what takes the most amount of time and research, I think. Making the characters feel real-ish, and making sure the voices don’t bleed together…. too bad. 😂 Thank you again. 🥹

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Tas's avatar

Damn 😱 absolutely loved this chapter... I'm #team Ben 😁 I think him and Olivia are perfect 😊

Love getting the different POV.... Can't wait for Ben's next chapter when he's a captive 😁🤔😉 gotta see how he reacts... Just so excited 😆

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I’m do glad you loved it! I’m incredibly proud of this chapter so it means a lot. 🥹🖤

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Liz Horsman's avatar

👏 👏👏 Brilliant! They’re made for each other.

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Thank you. 🥹

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!

And yes I’m shouting… because it’s ALL the good stuff. This is chef’s kiss perfection and I adore the development of the characters, the way we see them meet from another angle… it’s just… everything I’d hoped and so much more.

And the Void reference had me laughing.

This is just so so so good! 🖤

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

YOU NOTICED. I capitalized the V and everything. 🥲 Thank you so much. 🖤🖤

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

🖤🖤🖤

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

This chapter was so so so good. I love getting Ben’s pov 🫦 #teambaker

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Ah, so #TeamJackson and #TeamBaker. Noted for later.

Garcia will get a shot at his own hashtag soon. 🙏🏻🥲

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Perhaps, and then I’ll have a second nemesis

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Oh my gosh, I love that for you though.

Hard enough to keep one reliable, responsible nemesis around. Nobody wants to put in the work anymore.

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Sapna's avatar

I love how dumbfounded all three of them are when it comes to Olivia.

I like Jackson a lot and whenever I like a character something bad happens to them and as Ben and Jackson have the same type one of them has to die, I can't with the second lead syndrome.

I hope Olivia kills Ben for my sanity and I hope Jackson doesn't go rogue cuz I will cry. 😭

I am Team Jackson if I was not clear already.

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I'll go ahead and spoil this for everyone, because it seems to be a genuine worry--I have no (current) plans to kill any of them. 🖤 I DO have many, many other *absolutely devastating* things written (and planned) for them, though. We gonna make #TeamJackson a thing now? 👀

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Sapna's avatar

I don't mind you killing them(except Jackson just hoping he isn't some psycho later on cuz I am already in love, I am in awe and scared of your brain). I am ready for the devastating plans, kinda love misery in characters it shows their real personality and reaches the core.

Yes #TeamJackson is The thing 💅 and being the first one to call it, I appoint myself a leader. I am ready to meet #TeamBaker nemesis.

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Wait—Jesus Christ, when did my comments turn into a war zone? 😂💀

Friends, put the knives and death threats away—at least until the series’ come to an end. I’d die without your commentary. 🥺

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Sapna's avatar

This is the kind of series people write fanfics about😭 This shit is going to get wilder

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I don’t know how to say this without sounding weird, so I’ll just say it: I love it. And I can’t wait. 😂

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Hi you just met your nemesis 😠😠😠

You don’t mind her killing him huh?? 👊👊👊

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Sapna's avatar

No. Not at all. I will celebrate if she kills him😏 I bet you can't say that about Jackson, he is a sweetheart❤#TeamJackson

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Jackson is a loser, actually. I don’t want him dead because I’m not a psychopath (ahem). But I wouldn’t mind if he ended up in a coma for the rest of the series 😤

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Sapna's avatar

That's blasphemy😤

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Nikki | Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I think Happy might be #TeamBen. 😅💀

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