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Devyn T Moore's avatar

Oh no...but I really liked him.

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Anoushka's avatar

That "so I had believed" footnote literally made my jaw drop. NEED NEXT CHAPTER NOW. probably need the rest of the book now. PROBABLY NEEDED IT YESTERDAY, ACTUALLY. I'm also just so in awe of your brilliance in writing Olivia, THIS IS ALL SO FREAKING EPIC. the dialogue in this was literally phenomenal, the way they both tried to outsmart each other with their words!!!! SO GOOD.

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MaDMan's avatar

Is this death to ascribe to Liv? This feels like a lose-lose proposition. You save him: you tie yourself to him, you don't save him: he asserts agency over you.

Good bye Ben, I'll see you in peanut heaven.

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

Ben seemed like not the worst asshole. He's dead, unexpected twisy, I liked it! Thanks for the link, it was scrumptious.

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Deer Girl's avatar

This is so good. Addicted.

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I'm so glad that you like it! And absolutely honored that your brain has developed a physical dependence on this story. 🥹🖤

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Deer Girl's avatar

I may be charging you for rehab 😅🖤

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I have $0.47 cents in my bank account—you and I are just gonna have to figure out some DIY rehabilitation. I’m sure Olivia would have tons of ideas. 💀😂

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

I adore this - Olivia is amazing and Ben was a fool to think he’d outsmart her.

I loved the small details, the banter, the delivery… all of it.

Thank you for sharing this delightful story; it’s a joy to read 🖤

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Thank you for the kind words! I'm absolutely loving being able to share it with you guys 🖤 Thank Y O U for reading, and for supporting me the way that you do. 🖤🥹

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Tas's avatar

Wow.... What a read.... Again....

I just read ch.3 and 4 one after another 😁

I absolutely love this... Even more -if possible 😂

Ben's confidence was definitely misplaced with Olivia 🤔

Can't wait for the next chapter 🤩

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

It really was, wasn't it? 😅

I loved Ben's character so much, I genuinely had NO intention...then, I typed the "you won't" line from Ben - it just felt wrong for Olivia's character to do anything other than exactly what he said she wouldn't. 💀

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Just wanted to point out what a creeper I am. I decided to refresh your page to see if you’d posted yet. After I already hearted, I got the post notification 😅

So excited for this!!!

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

AGH YAY!!!! 🖤🖤 I love that. 😭

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

“I’m sorry, Liv, what do other guys usually call you when you lock them in your fucking basement?!” Hahahaha an excellent point my guy

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Hey, I don’t think Ben is—or was—in a position to be asking questions. 💀😅

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

MA’AM 😭😭 I know you warned us, but what?! How could you do this to me?!?!

You better be stretching you typing fingers and getting straight into chapter 5

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Chapter three is already drafted up! 👀

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