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County Fence Bi-Annual's avatar

I just wanted to say that I've had your Olivia series on my reading list for a couple of weeks and your lovely comment lead me to catch up today. Epico is all I can say. More, please.

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Wow, thank you for this. 🥹🖤 I really appreciate the kind words. I am beyond grateful for the love that Olivia is getting. And there's so much more to come!

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

Want to know how they actually feel about the lip touch. Great flow. I dont think she feels disrespected, annoyed and resentful a bit maybe, but she is deeper than surface level things. More, she already knows what he is; used to being in a team where being assholish is... efficient.

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

This! In fact, if anything, Olivia thrives. Look at how much new data just walked into her basement! She didn't even have to kidnap them! 💀

I'll let you in on a little secret but shhhhh, don't tell anyone: Ben knows that Olivia's overthinking is *usually* what gets her into trouble. Like with JukeBox Guy™.

If she hadn't been calculating each and every variable, and would've given herself a second to really *consider* her position--instead of jump right into analysis--she more than likely would've stayed to a public area (especially KNOWING the bathroom doors locked from the outside). But she had too much time to think, and overcorrected.

Ben snapping at her the way he has through chapter 6, it wasn't selfish--even if it wasn't healthy, either. He's just trying to get Olivia through a high stress situation, the only way he knows how: "Don't think. Shut up and listen to the person with the most lived experience." You all will see what I mean next week, when I release chapter 1 of Ben....👀

But shhhhh it's a secret!

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

Each character is, as should be, true to being what they are in the moment. She seems to already sense that she is 'too good' and that it has a faulty curse, but, her saying less and not pushing back against formalities, I guess, is collateral to, more importantly, becoming evolved. Also she us human, so it's complicated. Her humility surged a bunch of times, I think, but it never overwhelmed her (the good side of her curse).

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

You get it! Yes!

She still has those feelings (humility, concern, etc). But she tends to notice the physical reaction it gives her, notes it for analysis later, and moves on. That's one skill I think that we all wish we could have. 😂

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MaDMan's avatar

Blackwater operators. I feel we're going to see Liv and Ben soon in some black ops theater of war. Venezuela? Colombia? Nicaragua? Would be an amazing honeymoon. Send me the wedding list website.

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

I need Olivia’s Top 28 now please.

Thank you.

Also… this story - I’d like it served directly into my veins (hold the Scopolamine, midazolam, and the fast-acting barbiturates).

So, no pressure, but I’d love the rest of it as soon as the void permits 🖤

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Wendy Parker's avatar

Yes, lawd. This is getting goooood. (Actually, it's getting better than good, it was good to begin with.)

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Oh yay! I'm so glad that you're enjoying it! Still no answers on who the Not-Cops are...or rather, were.

Any guesses? 👀

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Wendy Parker's avatar

A brotherhood gone wrong is my guess.

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Anoushka's avatar

NOT on board with Ben insulting Olivia like that (HOW DARE YOU) but ohmygosh I need more of the story!!!

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Brooooo

First of all Ben is pisssing me off. My guy, you were supposed to be “not like the other boys” but here you are telling my home girl what to do?? Ordering her around?? Sir you better step back.

But also. YOU ma’am narrator. How DARE you end that almost kiss like that 😡

Yall both are on my shit list now

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I don't know what you're talking about. I don't MAKE a story, I simply write the ones that my characters tell.

Blame the Great Value Avengers. 💀

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Hahaha that was a good line

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