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Ashes Of Love Poetry's avatar

Yes! Now I also love Ben. Casually looking for an excuse to fuck their shit up but not possessively. I gotta ask if Olivia carries a knife on her because she definitely should. Then you twist it on its head and it doesn't become a romance he's a lab rat. Phenomenonal!

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Thank you so much! That’s my favorite part of the series; even when I dangle a romance in your face… it’s probably *actually* some sort of weird social experiment. 💀

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Devyn T Moore's avatar

I am obsessed with this story!!

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

That makes me so happy!! 🥹🖤

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Anoushka's avatar

GOSH I'M OBSESSED. i love olivia. (also the footnotes! they were such a fun addition)

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I am obsessed with how much you're loving her and the story! At one point, I was told that Olivia was the most unlikable part of the series. 😅 So this feedback has been so nice!

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Anoushka's avatar

Someone really said that?? Excuse me a second as I look for something heavy to smack them with, because Olivia's freaking AWESOME. Her character's got so much depth and she's scary, definitely, but she's doing what she does for "good reasons", technically, even though what she's doing might not be... good? Or socially acceptable? Not to mention she's a complete badass!

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I felt the same way! Different tastes, I guess. I think that there's just a certain niche for this story, but I am very happy to have found the people that enjoy it. 🥹🖤

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Ma’am??? Hello?? Thank goodness I didn’t see this chapter until now so I don’t have to wait long for the next part.

SO GOOD. I love her so much

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I’m so glad you love it!—and her. 🖤

At one point, the feedback I had received was that Olivia was the least “likable” thing about the story—the story literally titled Olivia. 💀

So its very validating to get this kind of feedback. 🥹

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Some people are dumb 🙄 but just goes to show you need to find your right audience 💚

Any chance you want to post chapter 4 early? Asking for a friend 😏

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

You know what’s crazy? You can tell that friend that I’m polishing it as we speak 👀

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MaDMan's avatar

This thing will finish blood pouring out of a heart. Unclear whose. Do I have a favorite in this game? I do.

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Thomas Cargen's avatar

That was so good. She is like a super hero. Nice twist of the unexpected, always nice.

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

Another excellent instalment to the story… very much enjoying this!

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Thank you so much!! This has been one of my favorites to write and edit so far. I’m glad that you love it! Was there anything in particular about this chapter that stood out to you?

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

I think it’s seeing someone like me represented (I’m not conducting experiments, nor does my cellar have such cages set up 😳 despite what my search history may suggest). But I certainly do the whole exit checking, escape routes, the calculating and assessing everyone I meet. It really makes me feel seen - and it’s presented in a way which isn’t a “oh I need to tick a box to get some representation in” or adding it as a “kink” (for want of a better word because my brain is still not braining properly at the moment). But, yeah, the whole thing is just… perfect. And totally my style and genre too 🖤

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Ariadne Pautina's avatar

Phew 🤣

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

I absolutely love this! 🥹

(pstttt, it’s okay if you have one or two people locked in your basement, I won’t tell anyone)

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williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

Enjoyed your story/please continue

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Nocturnal Narrator's avatar

Oh thank you so much! That means the world to me. 🖤 Don’t worry—the manuscript that I’m developing for Olivia has much, much more in store.

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